Maureen J Andrade

Maureen J Andrade
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Washington,
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April 05
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Keith Richards writes, "Memory is fiction..." Perhaps everything that comes out of our keyboards is fiction, but it's our fiction, and there must be some truth in that.

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FEBRUARY 14, 2012 10:02AM

What Eve Made

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This is an almost-romantic piece of fiction for Valentine's Day.

   

Michele looked at the reflection of her naked body in the mirror before drying off. It glistened until the mirror blurred with steam. Feeling empty and without opinion, she examined the silhouetted contours of her figure.

 

Wiping the mirror with a towel, she gazed a moment longer at the quality of her skin, and sag of her breasts. What was once strident with life had given in to use and time. Pinkish lines directed the eye to where life begins… to what Eve made.

 

Well over twenty years it had been since initiation, and probably decades to go still on this holy and disruptive journey. Expulsed from Eden at seventeen, Michele wondered what this history meant…if anything at all.

 

Frightened she’d been on the night she was inducted. Though she trembled, she quickly learned there was nothing to be afraid of. Part of her, as some part of everyone, was designed for this.

 

Beyond the act, she learned what no one ever mentions: what it’s really like to be in love. It is to be so vulnerable she cringed to think of it.

 

The first boy wasn’t the one she’d marry, of course, and many lovers later, she found who she was sure she’d love forever. Soon, they went forth and multiplied. Conception came easily, and her mate and she rejoiced in their fertility. After months of growing like a pumpkin, she’d birthed three babies in anguish and exhaustion, only to discover unimaginable fatigue caring for all of them.

 

Childrearing was a harvest of gourds a mother’s forced to carry on her back.

 

But babies grow into children, and children go to school. Soon the gentle rhythm of family life lulled her into sleep; until things changed again.

 

The man with her now, the one slumbering in the next room, was not her spouse, as she had expected it would be at her age. Her husband left for another. At first enraged at his leaving, she found defeat had its advantages, too. Re-partnering was just part of the experience, and to believe differently was naïve, she thought.

 

Dried off, she went through her lover’s cabinet drawers to find something to untangle her hair. Scraping a comb through dark, unruly locks, she grimaced. At home she’d use a brush. The shampoo here made her hair dry. The toothpaste tasted bad to her. Everything about the bathroom was wrong, she thought with irritation. Wanting to go home to her shampoo and dry off with a towel that smelled like her detergent, she thought of what to tell him.

 

Smiling into her foggy reflection, she was amused at how inflexible she’d grown with age. Twenty years ago, she would’ve been impressed if the guy had clean towels and shampoo at all. Now, she was put out at generic brands. Shaking off rigidity, she opened the bathroom door. Studying the man beneath the sheets, she felt warmth towards him, and something approaching kindness.

 

With ruffled hair and sleepy eyes, he roused at her stare. He held out a hand. Though crow’s feet framed his eyes and gray salted his beard, he reminded her of her first. Something guileless and true emanated from his expression. A languid moment passed between them.

 

Had Eve known what she was getting her daughters and granddaughters into, would she have listened to that damned snake? Whose fault was it she spoke parseltongue? Michele mused, but didn’t know the answers, and so she climbed back into bed.

 

Her shampoo and Tide-laundered towels could wait.

 

What Eve Made 

"What Eve Made," Maureen J Andrade, 2012

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I swear I know this story very well. I was there.. I want my own stuff too > I guess we want it all sometimes but we take what we choose is right for us.
Like good toothpaste and illicit sex..:)
HUGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG
I love that painting! My eyes get lost in those flowers and I can imagine how they feel on her breasts. Wow!
I'd say it's more than almost-romantic!
I'm sure this happens on a daily (morning) basis. I enjoyed the voice here, it rang true with the story.
Love is not for the weak hearted.
R
This story is poetry at its bet. The painting makes me long to hold so many flowers that my heart begins to sing.
rated with love
"...to be so vulnerable as to cringe..." is a heartfelt description of love. The picture of Eve is also lovely.
rita- thank you.

Linda- thank you. So fun to read your comments.

zanelle- thank you. I hadn't thought of the feel of the flowers...I like it. It is one of those peices that comes out and you're not sure where it came from.

Laura- thank you. It's the best I've got.

out on a limb- thank you. Love certainly is not for cowards.

RomanticPoetess- thank you soooooo much! I hope you get an armful of roses this summer and hold them...peonies might be less prickly though.

ccdarling- thank you very much.
A lovely moment; one I need to reconnect with. Wonderful story.
The ancient-modern theme throughout is intriguing and cleverly questions the nature of romantic love. Beautifully done, Maureen. R
I'm glad you evoke the 'first'. This is something I've been struggling with recently - everybody else is just a throwback in some way or the other. Which makes me wonder: how the hell did I screw that up? And how different would things be?
Yes indeedy twice. Shampoos that dry my hair, yucky tasting toothpaste (which is, for me, anything fake minty, sudsy crap)...all that can make me run for home.

But my takeaway from your story is that adapting is good for the soul. Comfort zones can be dangerous. We miss out on PEOPLE, which matter more than CREST.

Kudos and rated.
"...something approaching kindness." Sort of sums it up, doesn't it. I suspect the lean toward kindness is for herself, as well.
I hear a bitter sweetness in this, Maureen, but that's just me. It must come from getting to be just too set in my ways.

Beautiful painting and the prose.
How in the world did I miss this? This is just great, Maureen!
"Childrearing was a harvest of gourds a mother’s forced to carry on her back." Fabulous.