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My goal it was to reach a star... I spread my wings, but flew not far I hoped to make it past the rim. Instead I'm stuck... out on a limb

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MARCH 18, 2011 9:51AM

Fiction Friday III – Open Call Maureen and Paddy

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Maureen and Paddy

May I hold your hand Maureen”? 

It was March 17th exactly sixty years ago today when I asked her that question. We had met, for the first time that day, at a local park where it seemed the entire Irish community of Boston had decided to picnic that year. I spied her the moment she entered the grounds with her family. Red hair and green eyes; I had never been so taken aback by a girl before.

Why Paddy, do you think it would be proper to hold hands? After all, we have only just met”!

That was Maureen for you. Even at the age of sixteen she never gave someone an answer without first asking a few questions herself. As she grew into a young woman, then a wife and mother she only perfected this technique. Why she could dance circles around a question the way a leprechaun could dance around a field full of four-leaf clovers.

But Maureen, I feel I've known you my whole life”. My voice cracked as my eyes swelled with the fear of her rejection.

She gazed off into some far away place. As I waited for her response, I worried she would never return to me and the park.

Oh Paddy I'm so happy you said that, because I feel the same way to”.

That was sixty years, five children, fourteen grandchildren and a entire lifetime of holding hands ago.

It has been some time now since Maureen, and I have talked. Oh I talk to her every day. I tell her how the children and grand kids are doing. How I'm doing the best I can with the situation. Although I know, she'd demand I get on with my life and other things.

But today was special. Today when I arrived, the nurses had helped Maureen out of bed and into a wheelchair. We left the building and traveled the two blocks to that same park of sixty years ago. It was an unusually warm St. Patrick’s day for Boston, just as it had been so long ago.

I sat next to Maureen. Anguishing as our children and their children tried to draw her into conversation, only to be answered with a blank stare.

I could see she was getting tired, so I brought her over to our park bench. Placing the wheelchair at one end so I could sit right next to her. We sat silent for a few minutes, both simply listening and watching to nothing in particular. Just two old lovers on a park bench.

I turned to her then speaking from my broken heart.

May I hold your hand Maureen”?

Maureen looked up, as if she had just noticed me sitting beside her.

Why Paddy, do you think it would be proper to hold hands? After all, we have only just met”!

 I swallowed at something thick in my throat as my eyes swelled in remembrance.

But Maureen, I feel I've known you my whole life”.

Then she looked into my eyes and with the voice of an innocent sixteen year old girl said.

Oh Paddy I'm so happy you said that, because I feel the same way to”.

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You gave me a lump in my throat! Great writing~
I was screming..."Hold his hand Maureen!!"
rated with hugs
Tears and more tears. So incredibly beautiful....love, loss and remembrance. I have yours linked over on my site as well. RRR
Oh, good lord that is touching. As a Maureen who asks a lot of questions, you have my thumbs up!
Scanner: Everyone has to take their lumps now and then. Thanks for reading.

Linda: I could hear you from here.

Rita: Thank you for reading and linking.

Rei, Maureen: Questions so many questions? Thanks for commenting.
That gave me shivers!! A great story. I liked, "Why she could dance circles around a question the way a leprechaun could dance around a field full of four-leaf clovers."
rated~
This was so beautifully written, and so moving.
I know how deep love can be . I want to share a song I wrote about 2 years ago titled HER LITTLE MIRROR
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CRz-gbp6dLg
What Scanner said...so sweet and moving..........rated
Very lovely writing. For people who love, time is not.
I really could have sworn I left a comment here. Well, they've disappeared before. What I started..at least in my head..to say, was that this had the feel and the emotion of a scene from "The notebook"..one of my favorites..(OK, shoot me..I love that sort of thing!) Except for the St P's theme, I wondered if it was drawn from real life, because you captured it so well!
Susie: Thanks for reading and your comments.

Alysa: Thank you for reading Alysa, and most of all thanks for your comment.

Naomi: You are welcome to re-read anytime. Thanks

Rosycheeks: Thank you Rosy.

Flower Child: My thoughts too.

Sheila: Time is our biggest enemy, and our biggest motivator.

Satori1: I am not familiar with the notebook, but will look it up. No thank god this was all fiction. Although I do wish it were someones story.
That was sooo good..r
That was very touching. Made me think of a movie "The Notebook".
Very well done!
♥R
Short and sweet and rife with perfected technique.
Hugs, me: Thank you for reading and commenting.

FusunA: You are the second one to mention "Notebook" I live in Germany and will have to see what it was called here. Since they change the names of almost every movie here, except the ones winning Oscars. Thanks for the reading and the R.

Catch 22: Always glad to see you here.
Sounds true to me. Good!
Great piece!!!! RATED!!!

~sigh~ ~wanders off into the thorn bushes to remember lost love~
Leon: Thanks for reading.

Tinker: Don't wander too far!