Füsun A.



Montréal, CANADA
January 12
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I divorced my full time career of teaching after 25 years, because meanwhile I fell in love with freelance writing. Ever since, I decided to legitimize my ten-year fling which started in the new millennium. Author of: "WILL OF MY OWN - A Memoir" Available at all major book outlets. For a preview please visit: http://www.dictionmatters.com/


JUNE 14, 2012 11:50AM

Keen of the Darling River

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Darling River


" The Flood on the Darling River "

  Painting by

 William Piguenit  



The Flood in the Darling 1890


Iron Poet Challenge # 11


Keen of the Darling River


Füsun Atalay


My bed has shrunk; blue surface - a memory of my past

The scorched plains are bare; skies - the colour of brass

No kookaburra above, no breezes through bronze grass

Silence has crept and hangs above like a ghastly shadow

No longer flowing in the glory of my heydays - alas !

Snaking from Queensland to northern New South Wales.

~ ~ ~ 

Death and ruin are what I see everywhere I crawl;

All that bears witness to the flood of eighteen hundred and nine-zero

Is but a murky stream advancing on the grey-black mire;

While quagmires quiver and in debris salt-springs bubble,

Sojourner, if you pass by, listen: You may learn a lesson dire

And take heed when you hear the keen of the Darling River.


Füsun Atalay ~ Copyright © Will of my Own - 2012


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This is my first participation in the Iron Poet Challenge. I was planning to read and admire the entries of the super-talented poets here, but I just couldn't ignore Little Kate's invitation this time. So, doubtful as to if I joined the flow or followed my own path, I rolled up my pants and jumped into the river of my choice, let's say.

Here are the rules we were given:

1. Write a poem, in any form, from the perspective of a river ... not about a river ... but from the river's own outlook. Become the river! 

2. The river's name must be included in the poem AND the name must be that of an Australian river! (A list of Australian rivers and creeks can be found here. By clicking on the name of the river or creek you will find a wealth of information which might be useful in your poem!)

3. There must be at least one word beginning with the letter 'q' in the poem.

4. A number, OR date, OR year, should also appear in the poem.  


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To Little Kate and JD, Iron Poets extra ordinaires.
Well done, Fusun! I am most intimidated by this particular challenge, but may try my hand at it too.
I always wondered about the Darling River, whether the person it was named for was a distant relation or not.
I really enjoyed this - you took me there!
Excellent..a re we all not rivers of dreams??
I so admire you, all here, who try and succeed w poetry.

Fusun,what a darling, lyrical ρoem is your Darling River.One of my favourite English words is Darling.So rated ...Kate has gave you all so difficult rules and you succeeded in such a quality thinking and writing.Rated!!!!
Wow. That's so stellar, I'm in awe.
Fusun, what made you ever think of yourself as not up to such challenges? It's stunning. Absolutely breathtaking.
Poetry, geography and a little history -- what's not to like? [wanders off with a sudden craving for a Foster's and a walkabout]
Wow - what a fantastic job you did here. What an excellent start (at least the first one I've read) to this Iron Poet Challenge. You set the bar mighty high, Fusun.
Keen! Good use for the 'edge' of the dark quagmire. Nice job FusunA. :D take care...
This is outstanding!
Simply splendid poem.....! R
Oh this is indeed a song of lament. So mournful.

While quagmires quiver and in debris salt-springs bubble,
Sojourner, if you pass by, listen: You may learn a lesson dire

I love these lines and the river's message.

The Darling is our longest river system ... one of the largest in the world, I think ... and spread out through much of inland New South Wales.

Fusun, I know you don't normally write for these challenges but I am so glad you did. I can't thank you enough! You have a wonderful talent, my friend.
I thank you Kate, for the challenge. You offered a key for research- something I love doing. I apppreciate the opportunity to learn about your beautiful country.

Thanks to all who came and read the lament of Darling River.
This was beautiful. I was going to try one, but now I think, not so much!:-)
Hi Fusun! I LOVE your darling poem! I think we have a lot in common. My daughter lives in Montreal, I chose the Darling, I have a quagmire, and this is my first time to try this too. AND I love poppies. I am definitely faving you, fellow Sojourner.
Impressive, Füsun, beautifully transmitting the used river's sadness.
Achieved, Fusun, beautifully.
I love the illustration you chose.
Your take on this reminds me of our great ( anthemic) Dorothea MacKellar & her "I love a sunburnt country ..."

Rising from springs & monsoon rains in the north, our Darling struggles across some of the most inhospitable country on earth, south to the Southern Ocean.
You've inhabited her journey, & described the stages so well.

Thank you.
* Scanner - I'm waiting for your stunner. If I can do it. . .
* VA - Your visit and comments are much appreciated.
* Kim Gamble - Half of this was based on "guess work" between the time I read about the challenge and I wrote this post. To be validated by comments such as Kate's and yours mean much since you are natives of the country and know much more about your land, its history, and literature. Now I'm going to look up more on Dorothea MacKellar, of whom I hadn't heard before. Thank you!
* Pandora - We do seem to have a few things in common. What a nice way to meet! You've been favorited and ♥ed too! :o)
Beautiful, Fusun; you say it wonderfully. R
* Kate- There's nothing to envy, just go with the ~ flow. :o)
* Thoth- You are always so encouraging, thank you!
very well done! the start of "My bed has shrunk..." was inspired.
So why are you not writing poetry every single day????
Oh wait....because no matter WHAT you write...it is outstanding!!!!

FusunA --- so darned well done...and thanks for joining in. Makes this challenge thing so darn much fun!!!
Fusun, I just sent you a PM.

Yes, please do look up Dorothea MacKellar ...and My Country.

Oh and I see JD asks the question too ... Just why exactly don't you write more poetry? 'Cause I think you write beautiful poetry!

What fun it is to have you join in. Thank you again, dear friend.

: )
A good poem. Thanks!
It reminded me of Yeats for some reason....very nice. This is an interesting challenge!
*Lorianne- *Phyllis- *Wren- *Anne Cameron-
Thank you all for your visits and comments. It's so nice to hear new voices and see new faces. ☼
* JD - You are too kind my friend. I'm still learning from the wonderful poets here. Thank you for this opportunity to dabble my toes in the waters. (unintentional poor metaphors)

* Kate - Thank you for the lovely PM. My Country is on my list, for sure.
This felt desolate yet enduring, it made me want to know more about the Darling River.
I cannot write poetry and am always in awe of those who can. Especially one like this. Brava!
Great job. Wow. Glad you rolled up those pants, pal.
Oooh, ya done good! And the accompanying graphics - as always, you meld time and place. R.
Loved this good solid poem. Accompanying pics also beautiful. r
A lamentful and forewarning poem. I like it very much. r
Wow. I was "there" with your river. I am a water woman, endlessly fascinated by waters. You made those waters come alive--powerful poem, my friend Fusun!
"...if you pass by, listen: You may learn a lesson ...". Fusun, this was an emotional and visual travelling for me , and I want to thank you for sharing.

Here in Greece, is 8 o'clock in the evening, and when we meet, we say " Kalispera'' (goodevening) at this hour.

So my Kalispera to you, with many thank you for your dreamy work.

Makes on ache for all the things now lost
What Linda says...
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............... *•.¸.•* ♥⋆★•❥ Thanx & Smiles (ツ) & ♥ L☼√Ξ ☼ ♥
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Oh this was so moving... moving faster than the Darling itself.
It also took me back in time... can water move backwards?
In any case This was great!