I recently ran into a blog, fender bender, nothing serious, where a writer did a haiku on ecology. You can see it here. And since then I have become obsessed with Haiku. (EDIT: It's not Haiku)
Valentine's over
My heart falls into a void
parachute needed
There is something about it that has pinned my subconscious against the wall and forced me to make up haiku after haiku (Didn't you hear me, I said it's not Haiku)
Roman history
Caesar says et tu brute
With knife in his back
It's gotten so bad that I have created an imaginary friend named Koo so I can say hi to her all the time.
Now my haiku (What are you blind?) is not strict haiku (It's like talking to a door). It's a very loose rendition (Very loose, like how an aardvark is related to a Blue Whale) of haiku, only following these rules: three lines with 5 syllables in the first line, seven syllables in the second line and 5 syllables in the third line.
Monosyllabic
No word with more than one sound
syllable is not
Strict haiku is best written and spoken in its native tongue. Someone once said, haiku can not be appreciated until it is heard in its native Klingon.
I think I am possessed. I am beginning to only...
Speak in just Haiku
three lines of five, seven, five
Oh no I'm obsessed
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It takes more than the 5-7-5 structure to make haiku.
Please read and pay attention to the definitions as stated by the Haiku Society of America -
HAIKU [1973/1976] Haiku Society of America Definitions Committee
An unrhymed Japanese poem recording the essence of a moment keenly perceived, in which Nature is linked to human nature. It usually consists of seventeen onji (Japanese sound-symbols).
HAIKU {2004}
Definition: A haiku is a short poem that uses imagistic language to conveythe essence of an experience of nature or the season intuitively linked to the human condition. (Emphasis mine)
What you have written may be called senryu.
Definition: A senryu is a poem, structurally similar to haiku, that highlights the foibles of human nature, usually in a humorous or satiric way.
Here is an example of haiku:
A warm Autumn wind
Sycamore shedding its leaves
Brown kites sailing down.
... and here's a Senryu about musician Ben Folds:
Rented piano.
But the rental store would scream
if they saw Ben "play".
Says the H.S.A.D.C.
Ruler smacked on hand
Birthday for cat would be fine
lick paws and meow
Thanks. I'm going to write Haiku (NOT) all day today.
The spirit of most haiku poets was that it is all something we are inherently capable of producing by observing out environment. Today's environment is less naturalistic than it was in the time of Basho, Shiki or Buson.
To continually disparage the (not necessarily professional but nonetheless legitimate) work of others is apparently easier than to dare produce artistic endeavours of one's own.
As a matter of fact ; I thought a Haiku meant snatching something when someone wasn't looking. Where did I get that idea ?
How can I learn if I don't ask ?